Argument Writing:
For the past week we have been writing a argument on whether children under the age of 13 should have a cell phone. I believe they shouldn't have a cell phone. I got my first cell phone when I was 12, I am now 13 and think that when you turn 13 you should have a cell phone.
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Hi Katelynn! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. This has really persuaded me a lot about cell phones, I also love the questions that you have added (rhetorical) in your writing.
ReplyDeleteTo be honest with you, I find that you really, I mean really, you don't need a cell phone untill you start driving. For a starters, where are you going to go? Nowhere, you should just spend you younger age experimenting and doing other stuff than being on games all day long. I borrow one of my parents and only use it when I am out of the house.
To improve this post maybe you should make the drawing smaller because it is covering some of the text on the side up. Can't it be bad for your health too?
Great job!
Mia
Hey Mia!
DeleteThank you for commenting on my blog and giving some advice for what I could do next to improve my writing.
I'm pretty sure cell phones are bad for your health if you have one at such a young age. Next time I will make it smaller, it's just that I had so much writing that it had to go over the page but next time I will fix it!
Thank you once again for commenting on my blog!
Katelynn
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